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Some parents say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for them to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Children are considered as the soul of the nation,
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 they should be engaged some or another activity in their free
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. pupils tend to learn from elders around them, their brains are in an evolving stage and
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 considered as the idle
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 to clear about new things,
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 some parents argue that they should occupy themselves with any sort of their own
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 conclude for the best
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, with parent send their child to school for studying where they are
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accompanied
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leisure
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 children are
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encouraged
encourage
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 on their homework or assignments,
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 some pupils are encouraged to
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 in groups like cricket or basketball, which enables them to increase confidence, and leadership
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, apart from
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 on group assignment where they would be dividing
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between
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 would be helpful for them when they are placed in
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, it adds up like a skill to them,
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, some people say that children should always keep their mind busy because they don't their teenage to be wasted if they are not earning new skill,
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ajor concern for the adults, rather than learning new
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 they have busted the
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arly stage. In my view, organised group activity plays
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ajor role because there will be
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ot of interaction and gather of knowledge takes place.
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econd scenario there
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 plenty of unwanted resource like video games and games that would waste their
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, rather than learning,
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 they need
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 like a mentor to guide them what to do on their free
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. Even in the schools they have realised the importance of
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activities
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 and allocated a mentor and student
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counsellor
 to advice students to what activity is best for them. To conclude, based on the discussion above
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 believe that
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students
 should indulge in some
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collaboration
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activity
 to gain their
skills
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