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In some countries, celebrities earn more salary than senior politicians Why? Give your opinion Is that positive or negative

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Famous
people
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 are increasingly earning a substantial amount of
money
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. In some countries
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the
salaries
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 of
celebrities
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 are significantly higher than the high ranking
politicians
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.
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 phenomenon and why it is unfair.
Celebrities
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 are richer than
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 because they have a talent of some sort as the majority of famous
people
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 are entertainers,
people
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 love entertainment and they will pay to see a rare talent so the more talent the entertainer has the more fame that person will get and the richer he will become. But in the case of
politicians
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 they earn fixed
salaries
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 from the
government
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 which does not provide large
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 even for senior officials, their
salaries
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 are moderate and will never equal a celebrity monthly income because the
government
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 budget is limited and most of it is used to improve
people
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 lives for things like infrastructure and healthcare. Entertainers earning more
money
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 than
politicians
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 is highly detrimental as it might lead to corruption because
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olitician who works in the
government
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 might become corrupt if they feel they are treated unfairly so when they see that
people
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 who are less important as them earning more
money
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 they think it is not stealing if they transfer funds from the
government
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 to their own pockets.
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,
politicians
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 work hard to develop countries and enhance
people
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 life so they deserve more credit than
celebrities
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,
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, the Sudanese
government
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 decided to raise governmental workers
salaries
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 which ended the corruption. To conclude,
celebrities
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 are gaining more
money
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 than essential workers like
politicians
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 because
people
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 love entertainers but governments should ensure that
politicians
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 earn good
salaries
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 in order to become corrupts.
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