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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#organisations #employees #dress #value #quality #work #appearance
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wentieth century, cooperate world become more competitive and for that reason
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most companies now give values to their
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appearance
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, while I side with those who believe that quality of
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 is more important. On the one hand, it could be argued that many big companies have defined dress for their employees and they won't allow their employees to come to
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 with jeans or trouser. Even they give some restrictions for footwears
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, if their employee has some kind of medical issue,
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 the employee has to take special permission for wearing those outfits, Which means that employers give value to their employers'
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, most companies actually pay well to their employees so that they dress well as they consider it as their reputation in cooperate world.
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, in my opinion, I believe that
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 is more important to the employer because it is what actually gives benefit to
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ompany . it is not something that employer think of firing the person. people made its position strong with their
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 overall it benefit the company at
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if
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erson dresses well but not done any
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 for the presentation
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 what does it mean to
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ompany.
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, if
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orker is not dressing up employer may ask him for that.
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if he does not
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 well how he may ask him for good
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. In today's world where most of
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ork done online no need to dress well because no one judge your
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 but your
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. In conclusion,
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 won't matter much if
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 is not done.
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, On balance, I believe
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 is more given values than
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