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Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nevertheles
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Nevertheless
,being a human
rest
 is very important to lead a
stress free
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 life and
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ool
mind
. The segment of society believes that leisure
time
help
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 us to boost
on
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m
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ind and increase
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Q level. Whilst other opine that
,
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the
mind
 relaxation is necessary for
stress free
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 life. I agree
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both
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 and describe in
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pcoming paragraphs.
To begin
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arious reason for using free
time
 in activities.some individuals do different kinds of activities in
rest
time
.To exemplify, sports
activites
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activities
, playing games ,
quizz
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quiz
quizzes
 ,reading
n
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ovel and other interesting books. The leisure
time
 is extra helpful
for
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enhance
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 your
mind
 .
In addition
, resting
time
 is
b
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rush up your knowledge and upgrade your IQ level. The person's who's doing a setting jobs all the
time
 they need to relax their body by doing gymnastics and power yoga.the reading books, novels, are
also
 helpful for
improve
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 your knowledge.solving
quizz
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quiz
 is too helpful for boosting your brain. On the flip side , a few individuals want to be
rest
 on free
time
 .
moreover
 mankind's are free from relaxation
time
 because he
don't
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 know what they can do.
People
 desire to spend
rest
time
for
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 reduce
s
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tress of work in
every day
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 life. In free
time
people
 like to watch movies to relax their
mind
. In busy schedule
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people
 do
rest
 for rejuvenating their brain and body.In break
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,
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time
 person feel active and energetic after completion
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their daily routine work. In conclusion, a few
people
 want
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relax after their day of work. These individuals may prefer to relax by watching
a movies
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. On the other side
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activities
is
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 important
for
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to
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 boost your knowledge and mental strength.
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  • personal development
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  • memory
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