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Many people believe that film is a less important art than other forms such as literature and painting. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Imagination is the word that describes that any person can think about whatever wants to think or he can elaborate on paper like
literature
 or draw a picture which is called painting or he can show on tv or make a
video
that is
 called a film, but some think that film is not less important part than
literature
 and painting. I disagree with
this
 statement and described in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, If we check our history of the world, people used to use paper notes or painting because there were not had a technology. It was good for those people who wanted to show someone by painting or express their feelings
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 a written note or a book.
However
, if we look into the developing modern world, films become a part of humans life. Films
is
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 not the only meaning of 2-3 hours long movie but
is
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also
 known as any small
video
 which shows both
literature
 and painting work.
Furthermore
, as everyone knows the world's present situation because of covid-19, no one can go to any library to read
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books or any art exhibition to see any painting. It especially affects on students studies, but with the help of technology, now people can go online and talk each-other or student do the studies online ,even they can read or see a picture by a film or
video
. In the end, films and
literature
 and painting are equally important in today's human life. It depends on the situation or mood whether
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erson wanted to read or write something or draw a painting or he can watch a movie or a
video
 and those things will never effect on a human.
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