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Some people believe that it would be beneficial if employees worked three or four days per week rather than five or six days. Why is this? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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It is generally accepted among workers that working three to four
days
 a
week
 is more beneficial for workers than five to six
days
 at
work
. I think working fewer
days
 a
week
 will help to establish and balance
work
 and personal life, and working 3-4
days
 a
week
 will increase productivity and improve the quality of
work
.
First
, one of the key benefits of shorter working hours is increased creativity, intelligence and employee enthusiasm for the job.
This
work
 schedule allows
employees
 to spend more time with their friends and family, which contributes to their mental health. Proper rest refreshes the mind and helps to participate in social life. Due to busy schedules, workers are overworked, which harms physical and mental health, as well as increases stress and fatigue, which can even affect productivity and quality of
work
.
In addition
, 3-4
days
 of
work
 are useful not only for
employees
,
Add the word(s)
but,
show examples
 they are
also
 useful for employers, because due to constant stress and workload,
employees
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but employees also
show examples
 refuse to
work
 and leave for another company, etc., and if you reduce the workforce time and provide more
days
 off for
employees
, as the absence of workload and stress,
employees
 will
work
 better so as not to lose
such
work
, and
this
 will be beneficial for employers. In conclusion, it should be noted that a balanced
work
week
 with 3
days
 off for employers can have positive results on both sides, better results - better creative solutions and faster projects. It might be worth trying to take 3
days
 off for a few months to see how it affects the quality of the
work
.
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