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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them.what are advantages and disadvantages of renting a home.

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In recent years the number of
people
are
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 increasing in many
nation
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 to live in rental accommodation
Instead
 of buying a
house
.
This
 essay will not only discuss
benefits
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the benefits
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 of associated with
this
 trend but its drawback will
also
 be highlighted. Despite the drawbacks below, there are more noticeable benefits which support renting a
house
. One of them is that many jobs seeker
whom
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 migrate from their hometown to metropolitan.
This
 is due to individuals have to rent
flat
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 or
house
 because they do not want to settle permanently where they will go for jobs.
For example
, in India, many
people
 can live in
a rental properties
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rental properties
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 in order to reside in a megacities span of time.
Moreover
, buying a new
house
 as a difficulty for
middle class
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 citizens because of their price.
Therefore
, many masses can take houses on a lease rather than buying on a loan.
For instance
, If they buy a
house
 on a loan, it will adversely affect
on
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their monthly budget which they will invest in a stock market or fixed deposit and take a profit.
On the other hand
, there are some downsides as well. A frequent criticism about
subject
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 is that rental
house
 cannot be
satisfied
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 our emotions same as
own
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our own
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house
. To elaborate, These
people
 had
own
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their own
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house
, they may build the
house
 as per preference.
In addition
, another demotivating feature to be considered is Paying a monthly rent which will affect the
people
 saving. Owing to
monthly
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the monthly
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 payment for accommodation,
People
 are sacrificed recreational activity which they will enjoy with their children. In conclusion, from
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above mentioned
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 discussion it can
be conclude
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 that renting a
house
 has both positive and negative aspect as well.
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