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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans. On the other hand, other argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various need, including uses for food and research. What is your opinion?

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Nowadays, an enormous amount of people believe that
animals
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 should not be used for their own advantage as their right are no different from
humans
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. Inversely, some people state that
animals
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 should be used for
food
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 and new inventions. In my opinion,
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, we agree to some extent that they have the same rights as
humans
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 there are more benefits to
humans
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,
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 if they are used for
food
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 and
research
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. To start with,
animals
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 are an essential part of
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food
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 chain, they help to meet the demand for
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that is
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 consumed by
humans
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. As they are rich in proteins, they are
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 recommended by the doctors.
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, chicken is highly rich in protein and by consuming daily
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 helps your body to meet the minimum requirement of proteins, which was ideally not possible by consuming vegetarian
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.
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 there are other by-products that are essential for
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such
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 as milk.
animals
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 are used for domestication like milf and
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dairy
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 products, cheeses,
Animals
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 are used in labs for performing
research
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 on new drugs that are going to be brought into the market. Almost, all the vaccines that are available in the market have been tested
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 on the
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.
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, by performing
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 testing has resulted in much successful
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. In conclusion,
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,
animals
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 have equal rights to
humans
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, human evolution will have not lasted longer if the
animals
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 were not used for
research
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 and consumption.
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