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Some people believe that it would be beneficial if employees worked three or four days per week rather than five or six days. Why is this? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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A 4 days
work
 at week, it is a really new concept of
work
 at the present time. Already some companies agree with
this
 type of working and accepted
this
 new system of working.
This
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 companies have experience with 4
day
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days
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 of working and their success have
increase
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increased
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 at
this
 period of time Working with
this
format
 have more benefits in
company
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the company
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. It is related
with
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to
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productivity
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the productivity
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 of employment and
employees
.
This
 fact has been confirmed by professors of Stanford University.
Also
 overworking
employees
 are less productive. By working 40 hours
at
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a
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 week,
employee
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an employee
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 of simple company damage his nervous system, due to
this
 problem
employee
 always was stressed and tired. Working over
this
condictions
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conditions
condition
 will reduce
productivity
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the productivity
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 of
employee
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the employee
an employee
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. Considering
of
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apply
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all of
this
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these
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 facts,
in
addition
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,addition
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employee
 has a good relationship with his family. 3 days of the week
employee
 can relax with his family,
this
 is a one of good bonus for
employee
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an employee
the employee
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 to relieve stress, it
is
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also increases
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also
increase
productivity
. By
this
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these
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facts
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,facts
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 we can say that
,
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apply
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 it is a good way to
increase
productivity
 inside
work
, but
this
format
 of working can give another result when employment
do
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does
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 a wrong approach.
Key
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A key
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 part of
this
format
 connected with hours of
work
 in
this
 4 day. Overloading of
employees
 can have a bad
consiquenses
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consequences
consequence
.
This
 actions can lead to decreasing
of
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in
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productivity
. In conclusion, I want to say that
this
format
 of
work
 can have a good effect on the
productivity
 of
work
. satisfied
employees
,
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apply
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 and good results will
increase
 the company's income, but only on one condition, the main thing is to have the right approach to using
this
 method.
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