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Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Some companies
compain
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complain
 that their new
stuff
 has no interpersonal abilities,
such
 as abilities to
work
 in a
team
. The main cause of
this
 is the fact that in schools and universities graduates are often
educated
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oneducated
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 how to be
competitve
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competitive
, not cooperative and the most viable solution is to organise corporate
team
buildings
. School teachers and university professors often teach students that rather than cooperate, they should compete with other students.
In other words
, by studying in educational establishments, people are taught to prioritise competitive skills over cooperative ones.
This
 results in interns not being able to carry out complicated projects in a
team
.
For example
, a recent Cambridge University survey found that 52% of new employees have difficulties with
cooperation
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the cooperation
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 and
team
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teamwork
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work
 working in corporate structures. To tackle the problem of the lack of cooperative skills, companies should organise regular
team
buildings
 for new
stuff
. By teaching new recruits how to
work
 in a
team
 in the informal environment, corporations may help new
stuff
 generate ideas and make common decisions in teams. Deloitte,
for instance
, one of the acclaimed consulting companies in the world, organises
team
buildings
 and offline
trainings
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training
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 every autumn that allows new
stuff
 to involve
in corporate
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incorporate
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 family and to learn how to
work
 in teams. In conclusion, the fact that young specialists are often taught in schools and universities how to compete, not to cooperate is the main cause of the lack of cooperative skills and
this
 problem can be
adressed
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addressed
 through
organisation
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the organisation
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 of regular
team
buildings
.
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