In many countries women no longer feel the need to get married. Some people believe that this is because women are able to earn their own income and therefore do not require for financial security that marriage can bring. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Marriage
is one of the most important
relationship
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between man and woman. We know about that for ages. But in contemporary
society
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some people believe that
women
no longer feel the need to get married because they can have their own income. I agree with that situation just
particulary
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particularly
particular
.
First
of all, if we discuss the traditional family the union of man and woman is a result of nature. Love is the greatest, wonderful, amazing kind of feelings and mostly
marriage
is a consequence of love
such
as a confirmation of feeling.
Moreover
, a wedding usually is
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very beautiful event and as we know, almost every girl dreams about the wedding
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Secondly
, if a woman things about children, the
marriage
would be better for rising up them.
Therefore
, it can be a reason for
marriage
.
On the other hand
, nowadays
women
have many opportunities for development themselves. There are many countries where
goverments
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governments
government
allow them to
recieve
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receive
the same education as well as for men.
As a result
,
women
can have the same job and even
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bigger salary.
Thereus
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women
feel more independent in comparison previous times when the main
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woman
woman's
womans
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role was mostly as a housewife. Now she can pay for many things, including food, clothing, taxes, and gasoline.
Furthermore
, she can drive as well as a man, and it gives the freedom of movement for her as well. There are
the
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reasons for enjoying herself. In conclusion, I would like to say that in my opinion, most cases
women
want
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to
get married at least once in their lives because the
marriage
is a special event. But at the same
time
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it would be better to have
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financial independence for themselves.
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