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Traffic congestion is a major problem in most large cities ,nowadays. What are the causes of traffic congestion in cities? what could the government do to reduce this problem?

People are facing
difficult
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 situation while moving from
place
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 to
place
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 in city areas due to the reason
of
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for
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traffic
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 congestion.The essay will scrutinize some of the causes and remedial solutions
of
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to
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 these problems.
First
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 and foremost,an increase in the use of private
vehicles
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 has become
the
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 major problem for
traffic
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 congestion.It means,most of the people are involved in different kinds of job and career ,so,they are preferring private
vehicles
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 to commute to their
work
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workplace
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place
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.
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 to
this
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,the maximum number of employment opportunities are available in the city
ares
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are
 which is leading toward more crowd in those
place
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,which is making inappropriate for pedestrians as well as
public
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the public
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 to move around.
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,most of the roads of the capital of every country are packed with private
vehicles
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,masses and public
vehicles
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 due to the reason of many governmental works can be done from there only.
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,movement in
such
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 places is always arduous for everyone. To cope with these difficulties,
use
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the use
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 of
the
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apply
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public
vehicles
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 should be promoted where same space covered by private
vehicles
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 can adjust many public
vehicles
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.In regard to
this
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,the high number of passengers can travel in a vehicle at a time
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however
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,in private automobiles only one or two people can travel which is causing more
traffic
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conjestion
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congestion
.
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 to
this
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,
government
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the government
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 should plan urbanization in a
substainable
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sustainable
 way so that it will reduce the number of
vehicles
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 as well as
public
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the public
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 crowd in the city areas. In conclusion,outnumbered private
vehicles
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 which
everbody
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everybody
 are selecting for travelling is
resulting
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inresulting
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traffic
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 congestion which can be minimized by promoting masses to use public
vehicles
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 if it is possible and
also
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 bureaucrats can play
vital
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a vital
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 role by planning urbanization in a
substainable
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sustainable
 way.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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