Traffic congestion is a major problem in most large cities ,nowadays. What are the causes of traffic congestion in cities? what could the government do to reduce this problem?

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situation while moving from
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in city areas due to the reason
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traffic
congestion.The essay will scrutinize some of the causes and remedial solutions
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these problems.
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and foremost,an increase in the use of private
vehicles
has become
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major problem for
traffic
congestion.It means,most of the people are involved in different kinds of job and career ,so,they are preferring private
vehicles
to commute to their
work
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.
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to
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,the maximum number of employment opportunities are available in the city
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which is leading toward more crowd in those
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,which is making inappropriate for pedestrians as well as
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to move around.
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,most of the roads of the capital of every country are packed with private
vehicles
,masses and public
vehicles
due to the reason of many governmental works can be done from there only.
Therefore
,movement in
such
places is always arduous for everyone. To cope with these difficulties,
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public
vehicles
should be promoted where same space covered by private
vehicles
can adjust many public
vehicles
.In regard to
this
,the high number of passengers can travel in a vehicle at a time
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,in private automobiles only one or two people can travel which is causing more
traffic
conjestion
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should plan urbanization in a
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way so that it will reduce the number of
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as well as
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crowd in the city areas. In conclusion,outnumbered private
vehicles
which
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are selecting for travelling is
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traffic
congestion which can be minimized by promoting masses to use public
vehicles
if it is possible and
also
bureaucrats can play
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role by planning urbanization in a
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