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Many students have to study subjects which they do not like. some people think this is a complete waste of time. do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In today's competitive world,
pupil
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 has to study
subjects
 that they are not interested in
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school
.
However
, a broad knowledge is needed to succeed in any field,
thus
 I disagree
that is
 an utter waste of time study
such
subjects
.
First
 and foremost, I believe that all
subjects
 are of great importance for the holistic development of the students.They need to study all
subjects
 equally at the
school
 level.
Moreover
, after thorough research and experiment
school
 board has approved
school
 curriculum and syllabus which is mandatory at the primary level to prepare them for future competition.
In addition
,high profile companies always admire candidates who have good knowledge and grasp of various
subjects
.
For example
, Maths and Science enhance critically and cognitive skills , whereas Arts,history and Environmental are beneficial for general knowledge of the students. Moving
further
, students at a young age are not mature enough to make
such
 decisions. Ascertain
subjects
 might interest them more, as compared to other
subjects
 but it is irrelevant to ignore the importance of other
subjects
,perhaps their immature brain is not strong enough to make
such
 decisions.
Furthermore
, in the case of young children, their thoughts are too limited, so if they are given the freedom to choose
subjects
 of their own choice, they might be lost in the world of fantasies which could lead to serious problems for their future career. In conclusion, education is
such
 a possession which never lets the possessor down. It does payback in some way or the other.
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