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Some people believe that the fast pace and stress of modern life is having a negative effect on families. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Part of the population
do
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 not believe that living
life
 in a rush and under stress can affect negatively families lives, while others claim that the negative impacts are undeniable.
This
 essay will discuss some aspects of
this
 matter and stand with those who
decrying
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 the effects of living
life
 under pressure.
To begin
 with, historically, humans are recognized for having the ability to adapt themselves
accordingly
 to the environment.
This
 inherent ability
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 lead humanity to overcome obstacles and
barries
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barriers
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 throughout the years.
Nevertheless
, nowadays, due to the competitiveness of the world, people have to spend long hours working and studying,
leting
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letting
 their families in the companionship of technological tools and modern gadgets. A study published in Canada has shown that
fourty
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forty
 per cent of parents only spend time with their infants during the weekends.
Moreover
, the combination of pressure and stress is responsible for the development of mental diseases
such
 as depression and anxiety.
Firstly
, people who live the fast pace of modern
life
 take the chance of putting their marriage at risk once problems regarding their intimacy might flourish.
Secondly
, people dealing with depression are less likely to support family members emotionally and provide
good
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 example for children and youngsters.
Consequently
, teenagers could suffer
with
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from
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 the absence of their relatives in a delicate moment of their lives. To summarize,
although
 humanity is recognized
of
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for
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 having the ability
of adapting
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to adapt
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 themselves and overcome natural and social problems, living the fast pace and stress of modern
life
 can inflict severe damages in families lives.
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