Some people believe that the fast pace and stress of modern life is having a negative effect on families. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Part of the population
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not believe that living
life
in a rush and under stress can affect negatively families lives, while others claim that the negative impacts are undeniable.
This
essay will discuss some aspects of
this
matter and stand with those who
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the effects of living
life
under pressure.
To begin
with, historically, humans are recognized for having the ability to adapt themselves
accordingly
to the environment.
This
inherent ability
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lead humanity to overcome obstacles and
barries
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throughout the years.
Nevertheless
, nowadays, due to the competitiveness of the world, people have to spend long hours working and studying,
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their families in the companionship of technological tools and modern gadgets. A study published in Canada has shown that
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per cent of parents only spend time with their infants during the weekends.
Moreover
, the combination of pressure and stress is responsible for the development of mental diseases
such
as depression and anxiety.
Firstly
, people who live the fast pace of modern
life
take the chance of putting their marriage at risk once problems regarding their intimacy might flourish.
Secondly
, people dealing with depression are less likely to support family members emotionally and provide
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example for children and youngsters.
Consequently
, teenagers could suffer
with
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the absence of their relatives in a delicate moment of their lives. To summarize,
although
humanity is recognized
of
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having the ability
of adapting
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themselves and overcome natural and social problems, living the fast pace and stress of modern
life
can inflict severe damages in families lives.
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