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In ``times, many people are making the decision to live alone. What are the causes of this? Does it have positive or negatives effects on society?

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Nowadays, many
people
 want to live alone as they prefer to live an independent life and
also
 to avoid restrictions which get created when they live with family. The following essay will showcase the causes of
this
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 decisions and
also
 will give an opinion
whether
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 it
have
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 positive or negative effects on society. One of the main causes of staying alone is that we have to manage things on our own
such
 as the budget , everyday rent. To illustrate, if a person is staying alone, he has to manage everything
such
 as electricity bills and
also
 the budget related to food and when he is with the family, he
do
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 not need to take care of these things as
this
 is managed by the elder
people
.
Secondly
 , most of them cannot enjoy celebrations with their loved ones, especially,
people
 who are staying abroad and completing their master degree.
On the other hand
 ,
this
 decision
have
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 positive, as well as, negative impact on society.
People
 get time to focus on their dreams as they are not disturbed by the matters that are related to their family.
However
, many of them get used to
the
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bad habits
such
 as consuming drugs , alcohol and due to
this
, there is a negative impact on
community
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. To illustrate, if a per
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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