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Nowadays many people have access to computers and a large number of children enjoy playing video games. What are the advantages and disadvantages of playing video games for children?

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recent years, various sectors have thrived, including technology which has developed vigorously.
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, computers are now easily accessible to everyone, even children are not exempt
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 either alone or online with peers. Unsurprisingly,the question of whether
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 of many debates. Looking at the positive aspects, using computers to play video
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 be helpful, because kids tend to perform better in terms of cognitive skills, and they do come up with more sophisticated solutions
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 in practical life,
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 those who are obsessed with racing
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 are learning much quicker in driving lessons and are involved in fewer car accidents.
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 among kids can negatively impact them, because frequent and repetitive
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 can develop into habits, which eventually may lead to addiction and in consequence alter and ruin their social life, provided that up to date studies confirm kids addicted
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 gaming are more at risk of developing some sort of anti-social personality traits.
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 which can motivate children to vandalise, commit crimes, and get involved in violence, which may unintentionally replicate harmful actions within siblings and mates, causing serious harm. In conclusion, video
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, like many other common trends nowadays, can be a source of improving one’s abilities; or on the opposite, damage their life.
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 why maintaining a balanced schedule is crucial in ensuring the safety of the technology.
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