Some people think that climate change could have a negative effect on business. Other people think that climate change could create more business opportunities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many people
reveals
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their opinions about the negative effect of
climate
change
that causes
the
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bad time in
business
. Meanwhile, others think
this
environment
issues
could lead
more
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creative opportunities in the
business
. According to
this
statement, I believe that
climate
change
is the importance
issues
induced by human especially in the industrials which involving in
business
.
Climate
change
can make the
business
need to restrict their rules in their industrial factors to adapt
in
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globalize environment
issues
.
However
, it the sign of an improvement through the
business
models to live as a sustainable
business
and harmless to the resources of the planet as much as they can. It is a tendency to believe that
climate
issues
are the big factors that cause a negative effect on
business
.
For example
, many industrial factories
such
as
water
drinking companies are now facing
with
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the problem of massive draughts and rare
of
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fresh
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freshwater
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water
to manufactured.
This
reason is from the
climate
issues
which including greenhouses effect and
leads
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the increasing of ocean levels and destroyed balance of fresh
water
in
many
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location
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around the world. The
water
company has
the
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production less than the consumption requires.
This
is why
climate
change
issues
are affect
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on
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the
business
. From another point of view, There
is
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the greatest opportunities for
business
to create their ways of
sustainable
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company. For
instant
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, the big department stores
such
as Pink N Pay or Wall Marts are now reducing the plastic bag and encourage the customers to concerns more about
environment
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issues
. These company will
change
the money for whom that need the plastic bag when they come to the shopping
center
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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