The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in Towns A and B in two years, 1960 and 2010. Write at least 150 words.
The two pie charts compare the rate of people working
different
Change preposition
in different
quarter
in cities A and B in 1960 and 2010 Fix the agreement mistake
quarters
respectivitly
.
It is evident from the graph that Correct your spelling
respectively
in
town A was Change preposition
apply
focus
on Wrong verb form
focused
production
and town B was pushed on sales production
between 1960 and 2010.
in the first , city A during 1960, sales and services proportion
Change the noun form
proportions
were
30 % and 41% . in 2010, both Change the verb form
was
ratio
were reduced meanwhile Change to a plural noun
ratios
production
ratio was grow
Change the verb form
grew
up
around 35% in 2010 as Change preposition
to
compare
to 1960.
in Change the form of the verb
compared
second
, town B in 2010 , sales proportion was dip around 17% . in 2010, services
and Correct article usage
the services
production
ratio were slight
Change the word
slightly
rise
around 2% and 15% Change the noun form
rises
respectivily
.Correct your spelling
respectively
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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