The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in Towns A and B in two years, 1960 and 2010. Write at least 150 words.

The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in Towns A and B in two years, 1960 and 2010.

Write at least 150 words.
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The two pie charts compare the rate of people working
different
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in different
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quarter
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quarters
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in cities A and B in 1960 and 2010
respectivitly
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respectively
. It is evident from the graph that
in
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apply
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town A was
focus
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focused
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on
production
and town B was pushed on sales
production
between 1960 and 2010. in the first , city A during 1960, sales and services
proportion
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proportions
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were
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was
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30 % and 41% . in 2010, both
ratio
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ratios
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were reduced meanwhile
production
ratio
was grow
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grew
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up
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to
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around 35% in 2010 as
compare
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compared
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to 1960. in
second
, town B in 2010 , sales proportion was dip around 17% . in 2010,
services
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the services
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and
production
ratio were
slight
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slightly
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rise
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rises
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around 2% and 15%
respectivily
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respectively
.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words production with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • dominant sector
  • proportion
  • employment sectors
  • distribution
  • shifts
  • trends
  • growth
  • decline
  • main sector
  • 50-year period
  • comparison focus
  • analyze
  • summarize
  • changes
  • increase
  • decrease
  • evolution
  • observed
  • highlight
  • underlie
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