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Many processed foods and ready-made meals contain preservatives and chemicals. What are the advantages to this? Do you think that advantages outweigh the disadvantage?

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Fast and processed
food
 has an abundance of
preservatives
 and chemicals. Some argue plenty of advantages. But personally, the risks outweigh the benefits. Nowadays, people live a fast-paced life. Some who have been living in
this
 type of situation tends to be stressed, and tired enough to lift a finger to prepare home-cooked meals.
Thus
, human beings prefer to eat meals that are ready to serve.
Furthermore
, these sorts of sustenance are palatable. Humans choose what suits their taste daily and edibles are one of them.
For instance
, Filipinos love a mixture of salty, sweet and savoury, which
then
 Jollibee, a known
fast
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food
 chain that originated from the Philippines created a menu known and dear to the locals. So, even when they are overseas, cravings for Jollibee is always evident.
Also
, companies advertising
this
 readily available
food
 are offered cheaper. People always buy whatever is the cheapest, regardless if it’s full of MSG or any other kinds of
preservatives
. In my experience, with the pandemic going on, I live away from my family and I must say, I mostly eat take-outs from fast-
foodfood
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food food
good food
 chains because it’s accessible, mouthwatering, and very affordable.
Nonetheless
, these goods are not healthy in the long run.
Although
 I agree that they are ready to eat and cheap, they contain higher contents of fats, salts, and sugars which are the primary causes of heart diseases, diabetes, obesity, and many more. Albeit I’ve been eating a lot of these
preservatives
 and chemicals, I regard the disadvantages highly than the advantages. In conclusion, eating readily available and processed
food
 contain
preservatives
 and chemicals. They are fast to cook, delicious, and saves one’s money.
However
, it is not made to make one healthier, and slowly degenerates one’s health.
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