Many people work long hours living very little time for leisure activities does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantage?

Keeping
work
and life balance was always a big
chalange
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challenge
for human. So many
people
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ae
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too busy working long hours everything not having enough
time
to enjoy what they love to do. In my
opinion
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the drawbacks of working long hours outweigh its benefits. One of the most important
reason
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people
spend most of their times at
work
is to enjoy making
money
. They believe having more
money
equal
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a secure future life. While
this
statement is partly true, they have no
time
to enjoy their lives. Some of them claim that they do enjoy their careers and
that is
enough.
For example
, doctors have to
work
long hours and sometimes
over night
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and weekends as part of their jobs. They do love to help
people
and they get
involve
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to the point they get exhausted after
few
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years of
work
. According to the researches, the rate of suicides and burn-out is high among doctors.
On the other hand
, they are some
people
who
works
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enough to be able to make a living and their philosophy is to enjoy the
money
they make. Some of them even do not make enough to put aside
money
for extra
actvities
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activities
, but they still try to find
time
to enjoy doing free
actvities
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activities
like going for
picnic
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with family or spending
time
with
firends
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friends
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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