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Employers should give their staff at least a 4-week holiday a year to make employees better at their jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the growing fierce competition and the rapid pace of daily life, people in today's society are suffering from heavy physical and psychological pressure without sufficient res. Many people frequently change jobs
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 the imbalance between life and
job
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jobs
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. There is a heated debate about whether staff should
be received
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 at least one
month
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 holiday to
work
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 efficiently. To a certain extent I agree that having
rest
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 is more beneficial, but, we cannot ignore the impacts of prolonging
rest
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time
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This
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 essay will discuss both viewpoints. On the one hand, admittedly, companies can have many benefits from prolonging holidays.
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 with, long-
time
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 holidays will provide employees with more
time
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 for other necessary things, namely enjoying
rest
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, accompanying family members and developing
interest
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interests
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.
For example
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, several entrepreneurs offer their
staffs
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staff
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 some leisure
time
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 to stay more with their families.
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, they will adjust themselves to
work
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 after
rest
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 and improve their
work
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 efficiency.
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, the policy of extending employees' holidays
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lead
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 to some drawbacks. Allowing employees to have long vacations can be a great burden for companies in the long term. With few
staffs
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staff
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, the company have to delay the deadline of certain projects, resulting in lower efficiency and productivity,
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.
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, it is hardly any
firms
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firm
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 can carry out a policy of more than 15 days off with salary.
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, an extended holiday
time
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 will make people less enthusiastic about
work
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 and have a feeling of
bored
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 when going back to their workplaces. In conclusion, more emphasis should be placed on providing a vacation to enhance staff morale.
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, The right choice for entrepreneurs is to offer a suitable holiday
time
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 period of one or two weeks for manpower.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rest and recuperate
  • Increased productivity
  • Mental health
  • Enhanced creativity
  • Problem-solving
  • Reduced burnout
  • Job satisfaction
  • Work-life balance
  • Long-term benefits
  • Motivated workforce
  • Mental space
  • Extended break
  • Employee performance
  • Healthier workforce
  • Ample time
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