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The most effective way to solve traffic and transport problems in the cities is to discourage people from the suburbs or the countryside from moving to the cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#traffic #transport #cities #people #suburbs #countryside
In recent times, there has been a surge in
traffic
 in
cities
. Some
people
 think that one practical solution to
this
 problem is to stop suburban and rural
people
 from moving to
cities
. I completely agree with
this
 statement. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall put forth the arguments in favour of my opinion. Primarily,
cities
 are jam-packed. They have reached their point of saturation. It has become challenging to find a way during peak
hours
 of
traffic
. Industrialisation and urbanisation are the primary reasons for
traffic
 congestion in
cities
. So moving
people
 from the
countryside
 to
cities
 will prove to be a catastrophe. Since
people
 move to
cities
 for a better lifestyle, there will be an increase in the number of cars which will increase the carbon footprint, thereby leading to problems like global warming. Real estate prices have already skyrocketed due to the demand for living spaces. According to a survey, Bangalore has monstrous
traffic
 jams in the world. On average, Bengalureans driving during peak
hours
 ends up wasting an extra 243
hours
, i.e., ten days, 3
hours
 in
traffic
 each year. Another interesting thing is that companies have considered opening up office spaces in the
countryside
 owing to its calm atmosphere and fewer
traffic
 problems. Due to overcrowding, there may be a sudden increase in the number of accidents that occur on roads. Many
people
 who don’t find a seat in public transport will travel on footboards and may fall when the vehicle stops suddenly. Two-wheelers who want to escape slow-moving
traffic
 may be hit by cars.
People
 rushing to catch a train may be injured due to stampedes. Even though moving from the
countryside
 to the city is viewed as a sign of improved lifestyle, the truth is that it is linked to dangerous consequences like a hike in real estate prices apart from causing
traffic
 congestion. In fact, the trend is reversing now with companies moving to the
countryside
 for a better environment. In conclusion, moving
people
 from the
countryside
 to
cities
 will fuel the already burning
traffic
 problems. So it is absolutely right that we discourage them from moving to
cities
.
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