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Some people believe that the most important aspect of their job is their salary. Others think that the job itself is the most important. What do you think is the most important aspect of a job? Include specific details and examples to support your choice

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Now a days
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 the world has become so
compitive
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competitive
 about some matters. Getting a good
job
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 is
one
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 of them. Some people opine that the
salary
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 is the most important in their
job
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 but others think that the
job
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 what they did is the most important. I think both of the sides is important for being lead a
well
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life
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. In
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easy
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 I will give my stance below the paragraphs.
Firstly
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job
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the job
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 is
most
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the most
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 important
things
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 for
human
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a human
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 being. Anyone who
do
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the
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 better
job
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 has been treated
a
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prestigeous
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prestigious
 person in society. Though in the private sector there are a lot of
oppertunities
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opportunities
 to do but still have some trouble to face it.
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one
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 individual who work
at
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private
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the private
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 office or bank he has to work from 9 am to
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9 pm it is really devastating for him, but he earns
good
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a good
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salary
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. So,
salary
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 is important for him. Earning a better
salary
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 is good for
one
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 individual's basic needs.
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 as, he could direct his family very well,can give
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proper education to his children, can afford his dream house ,can go anywhere, and
also
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 give
soupport
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support
 to his family members during illness.
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, in any
job
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salary
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 is the ultimate
things
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. Without
good
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salary
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 no
one
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 can sustain in any
job
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. It is a basic
needs
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human
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a human
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 being.
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, in many
govt
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.
job
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,
salary
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 is not so important. The
previllage
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privilege
one
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govt
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.
officer
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the officer
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 gets is important.
Usually
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it's depend
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 on the
catagory
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category
 of
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job
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the job
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. Who works on
govt
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. sector think that
salary
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 is not a cup of cake. Doing a
govt
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.
job
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 is
prestigeous
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prestigious
things
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.They could get a retirement allowance after the end of their
job
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 and they would highly satisfied with that. To conclude, I
beleive
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believe
 that,
one
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 who
do
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 not do
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job
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the job
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 can not lead a prosperous
life
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.
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,
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job
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the job
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 is most important in
one
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's
life
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 and
salay
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salary
 is the ultimate
things
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 for
laeading
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leading
 a good
life
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 circle.
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Job
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The job
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 itself and
salary
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 both are very important from there different aspects.
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