Many processed foods and ready-made meals contain preservatives and chemicals. What are the advantages to this? Do you think that advantages outweigh the disadvantage?

Numerous frozen and pre-cooked
foods
have different chemicals to preserve them. Having canned and fast
food
has its benefits especially in our modern
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world where everyone is in a hurry and does not have enough time to cook, but overall, I am convinced that the disadvantages of
this
sort of trend definitely do outweigh the advantage There are various advantages to having processed and easy cooked
food
.
Firstly
, we are living in a modern world where we are so much busy with our daily routine work and not paying attention to our
food
.
Consequently
, we rely on ready-made
food
such
as McDonald, KFC, or other fast
food
.
Moreover
, without concentrated efforts on making
food
at home, we can easily reduce our time by using processed
food
.
In addition
to that, pre-cooked
foods
have an abundance of minerals and vitamin that are essential to our body.
On the other hand
, fast and processed
food
is very disadvantageous.
To begin
with, I strongly believe that one of the most disastrous disadvantages of using processed
foods
is
the
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lacking of hygiene.
This
is because
that
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those people who are making these
foods
they
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are not well trained and do not have any
food
hander diploma or certificate.
Although
frozen
foods
are rich in vitamin, these are not for everyone, because some people have been advised of dietary restrictions by physicians. To sum up, I hold to the opinion that the disadvantages do certainly outweigh the advantages of having processed or ready-made
food
for which not all people are being addressed while preparing them, as well as having serious concerns about their processing

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