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Living in a country where you gave to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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The bar charts illustrate information about the main exports in Southland in the year 2000, 2022 and 2025. It is clear from the graph that there was a steady rise in international tourism, whereas meat
products
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 showed a downward trend during the years.
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, dairy
products
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 experienced some fluctuations during the period. In 2000, international tourism counted for just over 8 billion,
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 was the largest amount during that time. There was a gradual growth to nearly 9 and
finally
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 to just about 10 billion in the predicted year. The rate of dairy
products
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 started at approximately 7.
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 increased significantly to a peak of just under 10, the same rate as international tourism in 2025.
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, it levelled off to 9,5. The figure for meat
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 stood at 6 in the
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 year.
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 dropped down slightly to 5,5 in 2022.
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, the number came down to about 5 billion

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