Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

While some think that a
diploma
is essential for people to get a brilliant
job
, others argue that it is more significant to build strong skills and gain experience at work. The following essay will examine both these opinions, and I will
also
explain why I believe higher
education
is crucial.
To begin
with, there is a variety of jobs where it is important to have
great
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a great

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experience rather than solid theoretical knowledge. To put it differently, almost all
customer facing
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customer-facing

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positions require
from
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apply

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applicants several years of experience in the same field, as it is extremely hard to understand
this
domain based on the knowledge from educational materials. As a case in point, a customer success manager must understand how to build a strong relationship with a client, and for
this
purpose, he should know humans' psychological factors.
As a result
, people with a university
diploma
will probably less attractive than someone who passed through the real complications and difficulties of
this
job
.
On the other hand
, one predominant nuance which contributes to the beneficial aspects of higher
education
is the fact that for a multitude of companies a
diploma
is still a mandatory
criteria
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to accept an applicant.
In other words
, while searching
a
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for a

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position on special websites, it is almost impossible to find a
job
description without the mandatory requirement of
master's
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a master's

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degree in the related field. To illustrate
this
, I work in a multinational company, which has clients all over the world, so the employees have frequent business trips, which are impossible without a business visa, and
this
can be obtained only with a higher
education
certificate.
Thus
, from my point of view, even in case a person has brilliant skills in some domains, he potentially cannot pass through the
first
step of
hiring
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the hiring

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process. In conclusion, we are all too familiar with the pressing dilemma
whether
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of whether

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it is better to pursue higher
education
or start gaining real knowledge. While some people claim that the
second
option is more efficient to get a great
job
, I totally believe that it is significant to obtain a
diploma
, as many corporations still rely on
this
nuance while searching for potential employees.

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