one people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenage should focus on the subject that they are best at or that they find the most interest. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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students
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in their
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. Some people believe that
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ought to learn all
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when they are in school while
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agree with those who think that teenagers should concentrate on the most
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or best subjects which were found by
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. On one hand, the curriculum
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the most suitable for all
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of all, all subjects were verified by
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of Education so
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can be follow those
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for the time when they
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.
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mathematic
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has better at
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, history brings
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student
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to historic place or event. In
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, all
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subject
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is quite significant for the preparation before teenagers find their jobs.
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subjects
which the find the most excited always make
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want to
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. The moods of
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before
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the lesson are important because the
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of leaner helps them absorb knowledge
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depth
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who
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math always gets a high score at that
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and really want to find something harder and enhance their
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.
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, the
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which
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want to
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can help them find
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relatively
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jobs,
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students
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are easy to get a high position and good salary on their career. In
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was quite needed for all
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in their
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but they should find their best
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to get more interesting on them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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