one people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenage should focus on the subject that they are best at or that they find the most interest. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People have different views on what subjects were focused
by
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students
in their
study
. Some people believe that
students
ought to learn all
subject
when they are in school while
i
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I

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agree with those who think that teenagers should concentrate on the most
favorite
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favourite

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or best subjects which were found by
students
. On one hand, the curriculum
is find
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is found
is finding

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the most suitable for all
students
.
First
of all, all subjects were verified by
Ministry
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the Ministry

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of Education so
teenager
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the teenager

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can be follow those
subject
for the time when they
study
.
Such
as
mathmatic
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mathematic
mathematics

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helps
students
has better at
calculate
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calculating

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, history brings
student
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the student
a student

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to historic place or event. In
other word
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other words

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, all
stubject
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subject
subjects

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is quite significant for the preparation before teenagers find their jobs.
On the other hand
,
sujects
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subjects

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which the find the most excited always make
student
relly
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really

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want to
study
. The moods of
student
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the student
a student

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before
get
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getting

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the lesson are important because the
behavior
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behaviour

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of leaner helps them absorb knowledge
depthly
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depth

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.
For instance
,
student
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a student
the student

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who
love
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loves

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math always gets a high score at that
subject
and really want to find something harder and enhance their
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge

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.
Furthermore
, the
subject
which
students
want to
study
can help them find
the
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apply

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relatively
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relative

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jobs,
hence
students
are easy to get a high position and good salary on their career. In conclusion, all
subject
was quite needed for all
student
in their
study
but they should find their best
subject
to get more interesting
on
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them.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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