one people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenage should focus on the subject that they are best at or that they find the most interest. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People have different views on what
subjects
were focused on by
students
in their
study
. Some people believe that
students
ought to learn all
subject
when they are in school while I agree with those who think that teenagers should concentrate on the most
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or best
subjects
which were found by
students
. On one hand, the curriculum is found the most suitable for all
students
.
First
of all, all
subjects
were verified by the Ministry of Education so the teenager can be follow those
subject
for the time when they
study
.
Such
as mathematic helps
students
has better at calculating, history brings
student
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the student
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to historic place or event.
In other words
, all
subject
are quite significant for
the
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apply

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preparation before teenagers find their jobs.
On the other hand
,
subjects
which
the
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find the most excited always make
student
really want to
study
. The moods of a
student
before
get
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the lesson are important because the
behavior
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of leaner helps them absorb depth knowledge .
For instance
, the
student
who loves math always gets a high score at that
subject
and really want to find something harder and enhance their knowledge.
Furthermore
, the
subject
which
students
want to
study
can help them find relative jobs,
hence
students
are easy to get a high position and good salary on their career. In
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, all
subject
was quite needed for all
student
in their
study
but they should find their best
subject
to get more interesting on them.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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