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Popular hobbies and interests over time and are more of a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication of what an individual really wants to do in his spare time. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#hobbies #interests #time #reflection #trends #fashions #indication
People
 like to do some activities for their entertainment in the extra
time
, whenever
,
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 they get out of their busy schedules. They make these their
hobbies
 or gradually they develop their interest in these. Some of them do have their own interests to be fulfilled in their free
time
 but, many tend to follow the overall
trends
 and fashions in their spare
time
 too. Most of the
people
 make their
hobbies
 which are
practiced
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 commonly and are affected by the present fashions and latest
trends
 which are ought to change sooner or
Later
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. They think that
doing
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 so they will be at the same level where the others are in
the
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society and for
some
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 these are a status symbol too. Children get affected quickly
for instance
 previously collecting stamps, coins, cards of movies, etcetera and playing with these was a major hobby. All these are outdated now and overtaken by internet surfing, playing video games and watching television. Youngsters
too
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 do not want themselves
legging
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 behind and they follow the new
trends
 immediately. They mostly follow the factions of
glamour
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 world, boys start joining gyms and girls become interested in the beauty techniques. Some of these are motivated by their parents, guardians or near and dears to opt
a
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 particular activity by saying them be a modern person and be up to date.
Although
 they might be having their interest in some other activity.
Moreover
,
the
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advanced technology plays its role too by impacting both urban and rural
people
 through various satellite channels on television,
internet
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, etcetera, they developed their
hobbies
accordingly
 But, there are other
people
 who have definite entertaining ways to be
practiced
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 in their extra
time
. These may be like playing golf, volleyball, football, cricket or going for a long walk, etcetera. Alike these, painting, drawing, playing some musical instrument which
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 performed by some at any cost. Most of these persons are of a little elder age group who may find these something different from their hectic schedules. To conclude, there are
people
 who
fulfill
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 their interests and enjoy their
hobbies
 in their free
time
 but, most of the
people
 are dominated by the latest fashions and
trends
 in choosing their
hobbies
.
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