The animal species are becoming extinct due to human activities on land in sea ? What are the reasons and solutions.

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The pollution problem in marine ecosystems has become getting serious as time goes by. It is high time we considered the factors that made
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contaminated and the methods that we can practice.
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, there are some several reasons why
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are moaning because of the pollutants. One of the reasons is because some mean factories or
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so uninterested in nature that they simply leak toxic chemical liquids to
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to avoid a lot of taxes from their country.
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, some tourists throw
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trashes into the
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because of their laziness. Even though
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ocean has the ability to purify any dirty things by themselves, it is not possible if they get too many pollutants.
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, because of their unforgettable behaviours, marine organisms can get any severe illness or they can disappear in the end.
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, we can easily hear the news that sea turtles were chocked by large plastic wastes or killed due to contaminated seawater.
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, some human beings bother sea animals just for their time killing on purpose.
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, in Japan, it is still legal to hunt rare whales though many international animal protection organizations demise it. Because of
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, it seems that the whales are going to be extinct soon just for human's games. To solve the problems mentioned above,
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there are some
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that we can do before it is too late. On the one hand, we should ban any
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that can be harmful to the
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. To specify more, governments should charge fines to big profit organizations much stronger than now so that they can't even imagine doing any undesirable things.
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, it would be helpful if governments provide some subsidies to them In conclusion, since there is a long way to go to protect the marine ecosystem, we should inhibit any harmful
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and take
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in many ways from now on.
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