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Children should be allowed to choose subjects to learn at school. Do you agree with this statement?

#children #subjects #school
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Some people think, that pupils should choose subjects by themselves.
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, others guess, that it must be done by educational establishments. From my point of view, children should be allowed to make a choice about the courses they want to learn. My thoughts can be proved by
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 of scientists from the USA and German education system. The psychologists from the USA universities have studied kids’ motivation about the topics, which were chosen on their own, and topics suggested by
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.
This
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 search was described in the BBC TV-show. So, the results showed, that students were much more hardworking, while studied the
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 type of materials.
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, they
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 not very interested in materials prepared by the teachers.
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, it is very essential to allow children to choose the studies they are really crazy about. One more example is Germany with
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liberal
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 system of education. Teenagers there pick out courses from the wide list. They can take mathematics, foreign language, or dance.
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, pupils can do
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things that make them happy.
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, teens go to school with pleasure and they are looking forward to each class. In conclusion, youth grows mentally healthy and they are big fans of studying. To sum up, the
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 countries,
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 as Germany, the USA, etc. prove, that allowing infants to choose their exercises has more pros than cons.
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 why parents and teachers should think about changing the education system in other countries too.
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