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Write a letter to the train company’s head office. In your letter,  give the details of your journey, including the date, time and where you sat  explain the problems that happened and express your dissatisfaction  ask about what action will be taken to improve the service

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dear sir, madam
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 am writing you
this
 letter regarding the issues that
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 faced during my journey.
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 recently travelled to Toronto from Montreal on your train number 13.
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 booked my ticket online and
ticket
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 number was 56489751. my trip was just a one-way trip.
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 travelled on January 24th 2021. my boarding time was 2:00pm. My
seat
 number was 2 and it was just 1st
seat
 on the right side at the entry gate. But,
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 faced some difficulties during
this
 trip.
actually
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 the
seat
 that your company offered me was not comfortable at all. it was
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 wooden
seat
 and I paid extra money for the
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cushion
seat
. And the train heater was working slow. I was feeling very cold inside the coach. I recommend you
to
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provide correct information on your website regarding seats and availability. There should be someone in the train coach that can address
this
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 on the spot. Thanks, Ravinder
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