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Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent do you agree with? How do you think space exploration will change in the future? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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In the contemporary world, discovering the universe is regarded as one of the ongoing and vital
process
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 in human lives. It is
assured
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 by some people that it is a national pride that
space
exploration
has
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 pay more attention than international collaborating.
However
, in spite of the endless competitions between countries, it seems to me that in the future they put effort together to explore undiscovered planets. There are several reasons why countries want to work alone in exploring
universe
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 and race with each other.
First
 of all, the main factor, which causes competition, is what various governments aspirate is to be powerful and dominant.
This
 is shown by the example of Russian and USA powers, which is, breakthroughs in
space
exploration
, seeking to achieve. Another reason might be that notion of collaborating could seem to authorities as
unusual
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 event. Since
,
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this
 race has begun
for
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a long time.
On the other hand
, there is a possibility of co-working of
space
 organizations on universe explorations in the future. Through the globalization process,
international
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 effort might come true in the world.
For instance
, in the modern world, countries
in order to manufacture something
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, in order to manufacture something,
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 collaborate with each other to achieve their common aims and it can be seen in
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 car industry.
Similarly
, it is hoped that in the
further
 decade authorities do the same with
space
exploration
, albeit,
space
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 race between them might remain unchanged. To sum up,
space
exploration
 has had more to do with national pride than international collaborations,
although
 I believe that in the future
space
 organizations work together on a common goal despite the ceaseless
space
 races.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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