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Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent do you agree with? How do you think space exploration will change in the future? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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The
second
 half of the XX century was marked by the start of
the
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space
exploration
 for all of humanity. Leading
countries
 started to launch their
first
 satellites, each in their own way.
However
, despite the minor display of competition, international collaborations have started to play a greater role over time and will continue in the coming decades.
To begin
 with, there was no concept
as
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 “international co-operation” until the end of the twentieth century. There were no
such
 diplomatic relations between the
countries
 as now. The start of
the
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space
exploration
 coincided with
“Cold
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 war”, political hostility between
USA
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 and USSR. For several years, the two superpowers had been competing in developing
space
 technology and regarded
this
 section of science as a race. They did not
focused
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 on working together; all each side wanted was defeating the other.
Moreover
,
rivalry
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 is a human quality, so the leaders have it too.
In contrast
, the role of international partnership increased within the opportunities it gives in the
last
 years. The role of
astronaut
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 has been replaced by many kinds of smart robots and artificial intelligence. What the majority of
countries
 realized was that it is no use always trying to be
first
. The universe is unlimited. Joining forces and resources, the only way to explore it is. In future,
space
exploration
 will enable other
countries
 to use
capabilities
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 of developed stations by providing unique contributions.
According
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 these,
space
exploration
 will turn into
valuable
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 cause for national investment. Overall,
space
exploration
 is likely to be a primary sector of international cooperation in future with the main purpose of research and profit;
however
, due to natural competition, establishing
space
 programs independently will be continued.
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