Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent do you agree with? How do you think space exploration will change in the future? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Nowadays,
space
exploration
is one of the global and actual issues. Some people consider that
space
investigation is more about
glory
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of
country
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the country
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, whereas others think that problem needs in international cooperation. I totally agree with the
last
statement that studying
of
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space
requires coordinated efforts of several states.
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the opportunity of upgraded technologies to change
way
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the way
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of
space
exploration
in the future. It is undeniable fact that leading governments tend to show their power to others, and often they show it by
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technologies and weapons. The reason why they do it is to gain respect and profit from that.
For example
, during
Cold
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War
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there was a ‘
Space
Race’ apart from hostilities.
Space
Race,
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finished when
USA
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the USA
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landed the
first
human on Moon
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and
were
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considered as a winner in
this
competition,
therefore
they obtained respect from other countries.
Human
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race faced many issues during the whole
mankind’s
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history, and it usually happened that nations came together to find a solution. Global problems demand international efforts.
For instance
, the ISS is a multinational collaborative project, it was built to study
space
together and exchange experience.
Therefore
, future
space
projects, like Mars colonization cannot be overpowered by one country, but if nations unite, they will able to solve
this
uneasy project. It is
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secret that
space
exploration
will be altered by new technologies. Many futurists
foreseen
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that scientists will create new engines that will allow spaceships to travel in
space
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extremely high speed. What we benefit from
this
is that
space
voyages will become common practice.
Moreover
, innovations can help in solving
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the problem
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of overpopulation. To elucidate,
space
studying is
topical
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problem these days. Despite national pride that can frustrate the cooperation, I think that multinational efforts in
space
exploration
will be
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part. Technological advancement will lead to accelerated
space
learning.
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