Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent do you agree with this? How do you think space exploration will change in the future?

It is considered that
investigation
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of
space
is more successful when
people
around the world cooperate and set their sights
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common tasks. There is no doubt that exploring
the
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space
is really difficult
work
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.
Space
is still
very
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mysterious place yet.
Therefore
, we need international efforts to reach
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achievement in
space
exploration. Collaborated smart
people
around the world can make
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influence at
investigation
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the investigation
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of
space
. There is progress created by
people
who
has
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been competing with each other till
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century. It is
force
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the force
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that helped
people
push the boundaries and made amazing discoveries.
Furthermore
,
space
exploration began with
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war between USSR and
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. It is obvious that
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to outrun and outplay helped them.
However
,
Space
is
hardest
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problem that humanity could face, so if we
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achieve really precious discoveries humans should be able to contribute and collaborate with each other.
For example
,
space
station “MIR” was
first
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international place where cosmonauts from around the world worked together and reached a lot of considerable highs. We can make a lot of important discoveries by dividing work between groups of
people
in the future. Exploration
space
is
complex
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task that impossible for one person or group of
people
. Cooperating
instead
of doing it himself is better and often comes to significant results. Considering all achievements, we should clearly identify goals and make really considerable breakthroughs in the future. We should ignore
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borders and try hard as humans for
people
and for
single
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purpose. To conclude, exploring the
space
is more efficient when
people
able to cooperate, work for common goals and divide job in
right
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way.
Investigation
space
is still
very
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difficult task, but if we can unite our international effort, it would be very useful and open many opportunities for
investigation
space
in the future.
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