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men and women are different in terms of their characteristics and abilities. for this reason, their jobs are better done by men and other by women. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#men #women #terms #characteristics #abilities #reason #jobs
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It is a debatable topic from the ancient years.The
gender
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 difference is enormously has been seen
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 past days.
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 nowadays the thought started to become change.In my opinion every individual capable to do their tasks without any
gender
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 differences.
This
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 essay will discuss the equality of
men
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 and
women
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 in
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society as well as their abilities On the one hand,comparing to
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the past
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 at present
women
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 are more extrovert.In
society
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ladies
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 started to get
the
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value by doing
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higher level
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 jobs.In older days
ladies
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 were not able to go out and they never faced others,their duties were only for
lookafter
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look after
 their elderly and children.
Men
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was
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 the breadwinner of the houses.
women
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 capabilities
was
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 oppressed by society.
Eventually
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 the
ladies
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 started to study and they achieved
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excellency in their academics as well as professions.
Women
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 showed
to
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the
world
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 they can do many things almost everything
same
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the same
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 as
men
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 do.
The
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 none other than
Mrs.
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Kamala Harris the
honorable
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honourable
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 Vice President of
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the United
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 States of America,Indira Gandhi the former prime minister of India like that many in
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,in
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 modern
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still
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 some conservative thinking people are living in the
world
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 and they still believe that
women
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 are not capable of doing some special jobs
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 as police,military,
aviations
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aviation
 and some hard work in the fields.Anyhow
women
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 made many records that they can perform whatever
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men
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 can do.
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instance
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 in Olympics all sports games are equally allowing for both genders without any consideration not only that the
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greatest
 achievement has been recorded by three Indian
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 done
by
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recently,
they
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but they also
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 flew from
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 States of America to India through the North Pole.Even experienced pilots would never choose that challenge but it has been done by
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.Like
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 many many records are breaking by
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. To conclude,there is nothing
has
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 been dedicated only
for
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to
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 one
gender
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.In my
opinion
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 both
men
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 and
women
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 should cooperate
each
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with each
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 other and work together,am damn sure that people can definitely invent many things in the
world
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 because
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world
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 created for human
bieng
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being
beings
not
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 for a special
gender
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.The new generation should never think about
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gender
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 differences.When people live with unique thoughts the earth will be peaceful and blissful
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innate
  • biological differences
  • characteristics
  • gender roles
  • stereotypes
  • equal opportunities
  • gender biases
  • fair representation
  • skills
  • qualifications
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