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men and women are different in terms of their characteristics and abilities. for this reason, their jobs are better done by men and other by women. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#men #women #terms #characteristics #abilities #reason #jobs
It is a debatable topic from the ancient years.The
gender
 difference is enormously has been seen
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 past days.
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 nowadays the thought started to become change.In my opinion every individual capable to do their tasks without any
gender
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men
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women
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society as well as their abilities On the one hand,comparing to
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 at present
women
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society
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ladies
 started to get
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value by doing
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higher level
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 jobs.In older days
ladies
 were not able to go out and they never faced others,their duties were only for
lookafter
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look after
 their elderly and children.
Men
was
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 the breadwinner of the houses.
women
 capabilities
was
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 oppressed by society.
Eventually
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 the
ladies
 started to study and they achieved
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excellency in their academics as well as professions.
Women
 showed
to
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the
world
 they can do many things almost everything
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 as
men
 do.
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 great example for
this
 none other than
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Kamala Harris the
honorable
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 Vice President of
United
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 States of America,Indira Gandhi the former prime minister of India like that many in
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However
,in
this
 modern
world
still
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,still
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 some conservative thinking people are living in the
world
 and they still believe that
women
 are not capable of doing some special jobs
such
 as police,military,
aviations
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aviation
 and some hard work in the fields.Anyhow
women
 made many records that they can perform whatever
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men
 can do.
For
instance
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 in Olympics all sports games are equally allowing for both genders without any consideration not only that the
greates
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greatest
 achievement has been recorded by three Indian
ladies
 done
by
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recently,
they
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but they also
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 flew from
United
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 States of America to India through the North Pole.Even experienced pilots would never choose that challenge but it has been done by
ladies
.Like
this
 many many records are breaking by
women
. To conclude,there is nothing
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 been dedicated only
for
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 one
gender
.In my
opinion
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 both
men
 and
women
 should cooperate
each
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 other and work together,am damn sure that people can definitely invent many things in the
world
 because
this
world
 created for human
bieng
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being
beings
not
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,not
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 for a special
gender
.The new generation should never think about
the
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gender
 differences.When people live with unique thoughts the earth will be peaceful and blissful
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innate
  • biological differences
  • characteristics
  • gender roles
  • stereotypes
  • equal opportunities
  • gender biases
  • fair representation
  • skills
  • qualifications
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