Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced number of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that in
this
contemporary world the people
mostly depending to
their mobile Change preposition
on
phones
than peer groups and even their family members.I completely agree that people
started to become introverted and socially Correct your spelling
withdrawn
withdraw
withdrawed
.Correct your spelling
withdrew
This
essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using mails and messages
On the one hand,the
mobile Correct article usage
apply
phones
made our life changed a lot than the older days.There was
very limited communication channels Change the verb form
were
were
available before.Add a pronoun
that were
However
,now messaging apps and calling apps made the
life much easier.The main advantage belongs to Correct article usage
apply
mobile
phone,it helps Add an article
the mobile
a mobile
people
to communicate very fast way.People
can convey messages and they can inform the emergency situations to their loved ones.Not only that people
does
not need to wait for Change the verb form
do
long
time for the post letters.The main advantages of mailing and messaging Change the article
a long
is
Change the verb form
are
people
do not need to meet each other ,especially in this
corona condition.People
will be less affected by the virus
On the other
hand
there are many disadvantages Add a comma
,hand
can
be noticed due to over usage of Add a pronoun
that can
modern
use of communication.Add an article
the modern
For
instance
the youngsters are always addicted Add a comma
,instance
with
Change the preposition
to
the
messages and leisure time with their Correct article usage
apply
phones
.They do not have time to spend with their friends and parents,this
may lead to severe
psychological condition in the future Add an article
a severe
such
as stress and depression.As I mentioned in the beginning people
are not going out and they are not playing with their peer groups,they just sit in a closed room and typing in their phones
.People
are not able to do their physical activity eventually this
may lead to physical conditions such
as over weight
and high blood pressure.Correct your spelling
overweight
Finally
Add a comma
,Finally
the
life will be Remove the article
apply
abondend
by severe health conditions
To conclude,Correct your spelling
abandoned
abundant
although
there are many positive attributes belongs to digital communications there are some negative aspects are
highlighted by the community itself.To control the over usage of Add a pronoun
that are
digital
world,every individual should take initiative by themselves.Add an article
the digital
Otherwise
a Add a comma
,Otherwise
headbended
future can Correct your spelling
headband
seen
in the future,that would be very sad.Change the verb form
be seen
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