Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced number of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that in
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people
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their mobile
phones
than peer groups and even their family members.I completely agree that
people
started to become introverted and socially
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.
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essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using mails and messages On the one hand,
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mobile
phones
made our life changed a lot than the older days.There
was
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very limited communication channels
were
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available before.
However
,now messaging apps and calling apps made
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life much easier.The main advantage belongs to
mobile
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phone,it helps
people
to communicate very fast way.
People
can convey messages and they can inform the emergency situations to their loved ones.Not only that
people
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not need to wait for
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time for the post letters.The main advantages of mailing and messaging
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people
do not need to meet each other ,especially in
this
corona condition.
People
will be less affected by the virus
On the other
hand
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there are many disadvantages
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be noticed due to over usage of
modern
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use of communication.
For
instance
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the youngsters are always addicted
with
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the
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messages and leisure time with their
phones
.They do not have time to spend with their friends and parents,
this
may lead to
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psychological condition in the future
such
as stress and depression.As I mentioned in the beginning
people
are not going out and they are not playing with their peer groups,they just sit in a closed room and typing in their
phones
.
People
are not able to do their physical activity eventually
this
may lead to physical conditions
such
as
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and high blood pressure.
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the
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life will be
abondend
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abandoned
abundant
by severe health conditions To conclude,
although
there are many positive attributes belongs to digital communications there are some negative aspects
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highlighted by the community itself.To control the over usage of
digital
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world,every individual should take initiative by themselves.
Otherwise
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a
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headband
future can
seen
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in the future,that would be very sad.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital communication
  • face-to-face interactions
  • superficial relationships
  • social bonds
  • non-verbal cues
  • text-based communication
  • tone of voice
  • facial expressions
  • body language
  • digital presence
  • real-life relationships
  • deterioration
  • long-distance relationships
  • misunderstandings
  • emotional richness
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