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One problem that every major city facing is traffic congestion.what are the causes of it? How should tackle it?

#city #traffic #congestion
Nowadays, it is not surprising that the issue of
traffic
 in every city has attracted many heated debates due to its impact on the whole society. As cities are growing, their
traffic
 issue is
also
 increasing day by day. In
this
 essay, I will discuss significant causes relating to
traffic
 congestion and try to suggest some possible solutions to overcome
this
 painful problem. As a starting point of discussion, let us examine the causes of
traffic
 congestion. The most common one is, today most of the folks use their own vehicle
instead
 of public transports which eventually leads to
traffic
 issues.
In addition
, as compared with the older days, now different types of bank loans are available with low-interest rates.
Hence
, it has become easy not only for the upper class but
also
 for the middle and lower class people to buy a car on EMI.
Moreover
, society is facing detrimental effects of
traffic
such
 as air and noise pollution. Analyzing the problem is essential, but it should not be the end of the discussion. Despite the pressing problems explained above, there are some possible solutions we could endeavour to undertake, Perhaps the best way to deal with
this
 issue is, to make people aware of its consequences
such
 as pollution. A valid example to illustrate the importance of the point is, In my home country India after a pollution index report got release by the government, people started to use more public transports and bicycles to commute to workplaces.
Furthermore
, the government should increase public transport facilities with low fare so everyone can use them. To put it in a nuts shell, I pen down saying that, it is on the individual; how we can contribute to reducing environmental issues. As every garden has weeds, all
this
 technological advancement brings some pros and cons with it, we should know, where to draw the line to get maximum advantage of it without harming society and the environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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