In many countries, people like to eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas. As a result, people eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do the disadvantages of this trend outweigh its advantages?

There is no doubt that
food
is more appreciated if it tastes good rather than just a delicious dish by looks.
Although
many people in different countries enjoy eating myriads of
food
variety cultivated in the region other than their own, it results in less requirement of local
food
as people prefer more produced in a different locality.
This
essay will explore
that
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why I strongly believe that the advantages of
this
practice are more than
the
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drawbacks. One of the most significant
advantage
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of promoting
local
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the local
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production of
food
items is that it can elevate the development of one's nation.
This
is because
,
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the benefit of supporting farmers of
own
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country by gearing up the supply of
food
material nationwide might rise the source of income to develop more in
this
field.
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, pulses which are typically grown on black soil are been not much appreciated by
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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