The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in cities and town closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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the online shopping system is drastically increasing.I disagree that
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online shipping will never affect
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retails
shops
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essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping. On the one hand,
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presently
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many
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keen to order through online because
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of technology.The positive attributes behind online
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shopping
shoppes
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no need to go out
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shopping
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they do not need to
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their valuable time in
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perhaps
people
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may travel far just to shop,
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with online shopping.There Cost difference is noticeable in online shopping,comparing to retail
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internet shopping is less cost.When
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started to realize it automatically
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turn to
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easier way of shopping experience.
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Amazon one of the well known online shopping application.
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can order whatever they need because A to Z items are available in
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shop
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affordable price is
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attractiveness of the shop.
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there are some disadvantages
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be seen in online shopping.
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people
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are getting cheated by others.Technology has been developed enormously same as that scammers
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become more energetic.Hitech cheating is going on in some countries.
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nowadays some
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are scared to do shopping with their credit cards.Some
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are still preferring for
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direct shopping especially in malls and
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.They can select the
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and size according to their wish.
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options
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available in online shopping to select their conditions,sometimes it will not meet the real
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shooting
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experience. To conclude,in my point of view no matter how many online shopping sites are available
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smart phones
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smartphones
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,most of the population still choose
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direct customized shopping.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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