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BRITAIN HAS PLACES TO TAKE CARE OF OLD PEOPLE. GOVERNMENT HAS TO PAY FOR THIS CARE AND FAMILIES. WHICH EXTEND DO YOU AGREE WITH?

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ELDERLY
PEOPLE
 USED TO LIVE IN PLACE WHEREAS ARE HEALTHY PROFESSIONALS TO TAKE
CARE
 OF THEM. BRITAIN IS A NATION THAT
THIS
 KIND OF SCENARIO IS NORMALLY ACCEPTED. THE COSTS OF
THIS
CARE
 ARE SOMETIMES
RESPONSABILITY
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RESPONSIBILITY
 OF
GOVERNMENT
ALTHOUGH
 FAMILIES HAVE DUTY ABOUT
THIS
 BILL. ANCIENT
PEOPLE
 WORKED THROUGH MOST OF THE TIME OF THEIR LIVES AND CONTRIBUTED PAYING TAXES AND BEING PART OF THE WORKFORCE WHICH AIDED ECONOMICALLY THEIR COUNTRY.
THEREFORE
,
GOVERNMENT
 HAS A PART OF
RESPONSABILITY
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RESPONSIBILITY
 ON TAKING
CARE
 OF
THIS
 ELDER HUMAN BEING WHEN IT IS TIME TO
RETAIRING
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REPAIRING
. FROM MY PERSPECTIVE, IT IS A HONORABLE
ACKOWNLEDGE
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ACKNOWLEDGE
 OF POLITICIAN ABOVE THE TIRELESS SERVICES OF POPULATION TO THE COMMUNITY. IN MY COUNTRY, IT IS NOT QUITE POPULAR
ALTHOUGH
 I BELIEVE IT MAY BE THROUGHLY CHANGED IF SOCIETY AND
GOVERNMENT
 WOULD DO AN ARRANGEMENT.
ON THE OTHER HAND
, THERE ARE FAMILIES WHO MAY SUPPORT THEIR OLD ONES AND
TO
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GUARANTE
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GUARANTEE
 THEM A
CONFY
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COMFY
 AND TRANQUIL STYLE OF LIFE THROUGH THE YEARS OF RESTING, THEY ARE WILLING TO AFFORD PLACES WITH SPECIALIZED
PEOPLE
.
FURTHERMORE
, IT MAY BE
ALSO
 AN OBLIGATION TO TAKE
CARE
 OF WHO HAD BEEN RAISING THEIR FAMILY FOR A ENORMOUS PERIOD OF TIME. I CONSIDER THAT IT IS A TRANSFERING OF
RESPONSABILITIES
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RESPONSIBILITIES
, AND IF THE OFFSPRING HAVE THE POSSIBILITY TO PAY, THEM IT NEEDS TO BE DONE, BECAUSE
GOVERNMENT
 MAY USE PUBLIC MONEY FOR A PLETHORA OF SOCIETY'S DEMANDS AS WELL. IN CONCLUSION, POLITICIAN MAY PAY THE COSTS OF TAKING
CARE
 OF ELDERLY
PEOPLE
 BECAUSE NOT ALL OF THEM HAVE
FAMILIY
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FAMILY
 WHICH COULD SUPPORT THEM.
HOWEVER
, THE MAJORITY SOCIETY MAY BE AWARE OF THEIR DUTIES AND
RESPONSABILITIES
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RESPONSIBILITIES
 WITH THE OLD ONES. SO IT IS IMPERATIVE THAT THEY BE
RESPONSABLE
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RESPONSIBLE
 FOR THE PAYMENT OF
THIS
 BILL.
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