Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, almost everyone is on one social networking site or another. Some
people
believe that there are a few downsides to posting personal details on social networking platforms. In my opinion, this
is true to a great extent and I do not believe that the benefits of using social media
eclipse the drawbacks.
Social media
is a great platform
to connect with friends and family. It enables people
to trace long lost friends and stay in constant touch with family. This
is a boon for people
living away from their near and dear ones. Social media
also
enables like minded
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like-minded
people
to form virtual communities where they can share their interests, post their opinions and work together for their favourite causes. For business savvy
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business-savvy
people
, social media
is a great platform
to find new customers and promote their products.
On the downside, social media
has plenty of negative aspects. Over the years, it has become platform
to show off. Now many Add an article
a platform
the platform
people
are only using it to brag about their achievements. They post photos of their expensive acquisitions and exotic vacations on platforms like Facebook and Instagram. This
can make their less privileged friends and acquaintances feel bad about their existence. Another downside of using social media
platforms is that people
are indiscriminately posting their personal information online oblivious to the fact that it can be stolen and misused. For example
, when traveling
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travelling
people
use geo-tagging applications to advertise their current location, they increase the risk of their home getting burgled. Personal photos posted online can also
be misused and sometimes the consequences can be disastrous. Oftentimes social media
companies themselves sell user data for making a profit. Social media
has also
been instrumental in breaking many homes.
In short, social media
is a great platform
to connect with people
only when it is used for its intended purpose. Unfortunately, these days, for many people
it is merely a platform
to boast of their achievements real and imaginary and for others
it is a goldmine of personal data that they can exploit. Add a comma
,others
Hence
, in my opinion, the downsides of social media
outweigh the upsides.Submitted by tazeenferozwork on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite