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Nowadays many people choose ready-made food and refuse to cook at home. Why do you think it happens? What are the advantages and disadvantages of such choice?

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Food
 is the basic need of
humanbeing
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human being
human beings
,
people
 are doing hard work in their life to serve the best for their family members.In
this
 contemporary world
certainly
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 the changes are happening.In
that
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,that
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 the major changes
happend
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happened
happen
 in
food
prepration
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preparation
.There
are
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is
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 multiple
reason
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reasons
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behind
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apply
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the
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people
 become addicted
with
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to
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 fast
food
.
This
 essay will discuss the
reason
 as well as both advantages and disadvantages of fast
food
. The main
reason
people
 are opting for
the
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fast
food
,it has been mentioned in the name itself,
it
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 is fast.
Moreover
the
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it tastes well comparing to homemade because the
restaurents
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restaurants
 are adding special
ingrediants
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ingredients
in to
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food
 items to obtain the taste.It is badly attracting
the
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normal
people
.Another
reason
 is
people
 feel it is
more
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cheaper
comparing
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compared
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 to homemade.Not only that
nowsdays
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nowadays
 both men and women
is
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are
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wroking
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working
 and they reach home very late at night, so they do not have enough time to cook and eat. The advantages are fast
food
 is tasty to
toungue
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tongue
 buds.there are many
restaurents
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restaurants
 and
people
 can eat whatever they like.Women no need to
spent
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spend
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 time in
kitchen
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the kitchen
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,they can enjoy
thier
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their
 free time.
However
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 there are many disadvantages
behind
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to
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 the
fast
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fast-food
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food
 system.It will
adversly
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adversely
effect
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affect
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 the health of
human
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the human
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 being.
Eventually
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 the fast
food
 may cause
the
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deadly diseases.Comparing to
past
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the past
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 nowadays
people
 have very less lifespan.
People
 are
getiing
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getting
 died or
getiing
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getting
 sickness
in
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the
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an
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 early age.The main cause all
becasue
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because
 of
fast
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the fast
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food
 system.In
additon
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addition
 to
that
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,that
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 some
people
 are opting for the canned
food
somethng
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something
 will give more health issues for
the
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human being.
People
 are not aware of how long the
food
 has been and cooked and preserved in the fridge. To summarise.
people
 should understand the difference between
the
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fast
food
 and homemade
food
.
Although
 homemade
food
 would not give
taste
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a taste
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 as fast
food
,it will be clean and good for health.
People
 should be aware
about
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of
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 what they are having for their daily life.
The
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fast
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fast-food
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food
 is a type of slow poison.
People
 must
be avoid
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avoid
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such
 unwanted
food
 from
the
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apply
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daily life.
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