With the passage of time people are less likely to make a visit at Museums. What are the Reasons for it? Explain this with the help of examples.

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day one,
history
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is the significant source of grooming and knowledge.
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, Museum is the major and physical picture of
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which
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allows
visual
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appearance of antiques. Whereas, with the flow of time
people
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turnover towards
museum
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the museum
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is getting lower. whether
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it has many reasons but on the top governments are responsible.
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,
people
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themselves are becoming mundane
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nowadays
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.
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, technology played
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worst role in taking behind the interest of
population
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the population
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to visit
museums
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as
people
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are badly addicted to
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smartphones
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. If universities enhance their focus in
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regard, it will never
be happened
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.
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, when I was in my university, I have noticed that 90
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of institutes were performing worse in fact, their
museums
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were remained close for
long
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a long
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just because of negligence.
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, in the schools now a day’s students are not being told by their teachers that how much it is important to visit
museums
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. Whenever
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students go to
museum
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the museum
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they could learn
number
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a number
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of things about
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history
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. Parents do not pay attention to their children to give them a learning environment if only parents start doing their job it would become quite better, it will definitely restore the old trend of visiting
museums
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.
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, my
neighbors
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usually go to
museums
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with their whole family due to which they are knowledgeful.
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,
Government
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should increase
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awareness among
people
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as well as
lack
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a lack
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in the budget is the issue. Only degrees are not important for
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human success physical presence of
history
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is the major input. Educational institutes, parents and
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the public
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themselves
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it self
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itself
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are the main suspects.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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