Students are becoming more and more reliant on computers. What are some problems associated with reliance on computer and what are some of the possible solutions

In the 21st century, contingent upon electronic devices
are
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on rising, especially school-goers, who extensively use laptops and desktops to the peak
level
.
Hence
, there are certain consequences of excessive use of these.
This
essay would analyse both the impact and solutions.
First
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to consider, the elevated
access
among pupils
has
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lead to a lack of cognitive skills development. Rather than giving our brain to work, when we give the computer to process our works, the intellectual thinking of the
students
are lowering drastically.
For example
, in western countries, the research has done with several
students
who
access
more and with less.
Besides
, the results have shown the IQ
level
of those who
access
more seems very low than the others who
access
fewer.
Secondly
, these adversities can be reduced by taking certain measures. As we humans should concentrate on taking the right balance of the consequences .The education system can encourage activity-based syllabus in schools. In the educational ,curriculum the government or the authorities should include activity-based pedagogy,
therefore
the
access
to computers can be reduced to a certain
level
and the
students
by themselves interact with other
students
and by themselves develop their intellectual skills.
For example
, The Sri Lankan education department has set up the curriculum mostly knowledge-based syllabus,
therefore
the
students
of
this
country comparing to other nations have higher IQ
level
. To conclude, the accelerated adversities due to excessive utilization of electronic devices among
students
are obvious.
Hence
, I believe, it is the responsibility of the rulers of a nation, parents and the related authorities to deploy proper rules and regulations for the betterment of future generation
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