some people believe that international sporting events are the ideal opportunity to show the world the qualities of the host nation. Others believe that thesze events are mainly large unjustifiable expense. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The international sporting

events

are getting organised more and more

now a days

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nowadays

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considering some years back. The host

nation

gets an

opportunity

to show their qualities to the whole world but some believe that these

events

are just

the

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unjustifiable expense. Though it is an

unjustfiable

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unjustifiable

expense

but

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apply

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when it comes

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nation

, I

am agree

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with the host

nation

. Arranging the international sports

event

is not a joke and it is not a single day plan. They need many hands together to make

this

event

successful as the whole world is going to watch them. The host country not only organize the

event

but there is an

opportunity

for the home players to show their talent and keep up their

nation

with proud by winning the medals.

The society

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also

contribute

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contributes

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such

events

by way of welcoming the players and tourists from different countries and make them feel comfortable and safe. In

this

period many employment and tourism

opportunity

gets

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get

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open to serve the tourists. The local businesses

gets

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get

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a chance to attract

the

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apply

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customers and sell their bests. The whole idea needs

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apply

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planning to achieve

the

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apply

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success in

this

type of

sprots

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sports

events

. We can take the example of

Common wealth

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Commonwealth

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games or

Olympics

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the Olympics

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. Some countries believe that arranging

such

events

is a waste of money

in other words

it's

unjustifiable

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an unjustifiable

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expense. But if we

dont

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don't

give our country a chance to come into

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the lime

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lime light

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limelight

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, the world will not know about us, our

palyers

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players

will not get a chance, they will not get the confidence to play, new upcoming talent will never bloom

thats

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that's

why arranging the sports

event

become necessary.

For example

. Seoul is

small

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a small

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city in South Korea, but they have

grabed

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grabbed

the

opportunity

and hosted the Olympics

event

in 1985 and by making the

event

successful, they kept their name

into

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the heart of the people.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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some people believe that international sporting events are the ideal opportunity to show the world the qualities of the host nation. Others believe that thesze events are mainly large unjustifiable expense. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder? Is it always a good thing to work hard?

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