some people believe that international sporting events are the ideal opportunity to show the world the qualities of the host nation. Others believe that thesze events are mainly large unjustifiable expense. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The international sporting
events
are getting organised more and more
now a days
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considering some years back. The host
nation
gets an
opportunity
to show their qualities to the whole world but some believe that these
events
are just
the
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unjustifiable expense. Though it is an
unjustfiable
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unjustifiable
expense
but
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when it comes
as
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a
nation
, I
am agree
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with the host
nation
. Arranging the international sports
event
is not a joke and it is not a single day plan. They need many hands together to make
this
event
successful as the whole world is going to watch them. The host country not only organize the
event
but there is an
opportunity
for the home players to show their talent and keep up their
nation
with proud by winning the medals.
The society
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also
contribute
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in
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such
events
by way of welcoming the players and tourists from different countries and make them feel comfortable and safe. In
this
period many employment and tourism
opportunity
gets
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open to serve the tourists. The local businesses
gets
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a chance to attract
the
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customers and sell their bests. The whole idea needs
a
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planning to achieve
the
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success in
this
type of
sprots
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sports
events
. We can take the example of
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games or
Olympics
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the Olympics
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. Some countries believe that arranging
such
events
is a waste of money
in other words
it's
unjustifiable
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expense. But if we
dont
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don't
give our country a chance to come into
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the lime
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lime light
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, the world will not know about us, our
palyers
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players
will not get a chance, they will not get the confidence to play, new upcoming talent will never bloom
thats
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that's
why arranging the sports
event
become necessary.
For example
. Seoul is
small
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city in South Korea, but they have
grabed
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grabbed
the
opportunity
and hosted the Olympics
event
in 1985 and by making the
event
successful, they kept their name
into
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the heart of the people.
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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