Art is considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology and business. Why do you think that is? What could be done to encourage more people to take interest in the arts?

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Nowadays due to the effect of digitalization,
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keep their focus on
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achievements and forget their cultural base. In
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situation and propose some corresponding solutions. I want/ It is important/ to admit that
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development and globalisation have become a reason why competition at work is as tough as it has never been before. As a famous writer said, we have to run with all our energy if we want to just stay
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, if decades ago
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had a calm rhythm of life, now we are all in a hamster wheel trying not to lose reached positions. So I think our certain lifestyle does not leave enough time for arts. At the same time,
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pandemic showed us that
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could provide /spark, awaken and increase the interests of society
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arts.
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of virtual reality might be used for providing
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sense of presence at famous museums or
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. Recent research of Cambridge institute discovered that during pandemic
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from all over the world started to use modern
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like streaming services to immerse in the world of arts. Undoubtedly, if digital technologies became more affordable and cheaper,
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would be more engaged in art. In conclusion, I want to say that humanity has been going through dramatic changes and technological progress might bring innovations that will alter the way we look at art. It is conclusively clear that
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trend will continue to grow.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancement
  • Economic growth
  • STEM subjects
  • Job security
  • Financial success
  • Pragmatic
  • Utilitarian pursuits
  • Art education
  • Inclusive
  • Engaging
  • Contemporary society
  • Social issues
  • Environmental themes
  • Digital platforms
  • Virtual museums
  • Interactive art
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