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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern world, children are in their own world of new technologies and social
netwoks
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networks
. To grow a positive character in young individuals, some people demand compulsory volunteer
services
 whereas others disagree with the new plan. In my opinion, I totally agree
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 mandatory
services
 for high school children.
To begin
 with,
firstly
, involvement in community
services
 grows a social responsibility in
young
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a young
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 generation which obviously bring positive aspects to
the
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society.
As a result
,
this
 would enable to bring peace
on
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 both families as well as on communities.
For instance
, working for charity by teenagers would help them to understand new aspects of life which would make them
to
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take mature decisions, so strict
regulatiuons
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regulations
 have to be brought in terms of community
services
 to make them see the world in a different aspect.
Secondly
, it moulds their character to a great extent
inorder
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 to wisely understand and help them according to their ability. Because
,
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 working with other young people would help them to have more patience.
For instance
, teaching sports to adolescents would generate a sense of
brotherhoodness
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brotherhoods
 and could become a mentor as well.
In addition
, maintaining
neighbourhood
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a neighbourhood
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also
 creates the same feeling. In conclusion, I fully agree with the statement and
believs
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believes
beliefs
believe
 that
introduction
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 of
such
 mandatory unpaid jobs could make future generation a better group of people.
Therefore
, these kinds of activities
to
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start from a preliminary age.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • neighborhood improvement
  • teaching sports
  • empathy
  • social justice
  • transferable skills
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • problem-solving
  • civic duty
  • civic engagement
  • educational enhancement
  • practical experiences
  • academic learning
  • real-world applications
  • social cohesion
  • mutual support
  • time management
  • balancing priorities
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